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1. Submission by:
Smit Dolse, Mumbai
An essay on 'My favorite sport' - Feedback requested in Marathi

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2. Submission by:
Smit Dolse, Mumbai
An essay on 'Books are my friends' 


 

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Assessment by BhashaLab:

1. Summary

Smit talks about the importance of books as his best friend. He mentions how books can provide knowledge, pleasure, and information, and can make us laugh or cry. He emphasizes the importance of reading various types of books to improve vocabulary and fill our mind with good thoughts. Overall, he asserts that books are his best friend and will always be there for him.

 

2. Areas of improvement

To make the paragraph better:

  • Smit can try to be more concise and to the point.

  • The paragraph could benefit from more specific examples of how books provide knowledge and pleasure, and how they can make us laugh or cry.

  • Smit could also provide more details about the different types of books that he enjoys reading.

  • Additionally, he could avoid repetition and use more varied sentence structures to improve the overall flow and coherence of the paragraph.

 

3. Practice areas for Smit

  • Practice proofreading and editing to ensure that there are no spelling or grammar mistakes.

  • You should also focus on developing a clear and logical structure for the paragraph, with each sentence supporting the central theme and building on the ideas of previous sentences.

  • Additionally, he should aim to include original and critical thinking in his writing, rather than simply summarizing or repeating information from other sources.

4. Spellings

'freind' can be written as 'friend'

5. Grammar

  • 'It gives us knowledge and pleasure.' should be changed to 'They give us knowledge and pleasure.'

  • 'they will always with us.' should be changed to 'they will always be with us.'

  • 'Books gives us information.' should be changed to 'Books give us information.'

  • 'That's why..' should be written as 'that is why.'

  • "or what was going in Past" should be "or what happened in the past"

  • A few other capitalization and punctuation errors need to be taken care of.

6. Coherence and Continuity

The paragraph has good coherence and continuity as the ideas are presented in a logical and coherent manner.

 

7. Tense consistency

The paragraph is written in the present tense. The tense is consistent throughout the paragraph.

 

8. Revised essay

Books are my friends

Books are our best friends who will never walk away from us. When we feel lonely, books are always there to keep us company. They improve our vocabulary and provide us with knowledge and pleasure. Even when everyone else leaves us, books remain by our side. They fill our minds with positive thoughts and keep us informed about what is happening in the world or what has happened in the past. Books can make us laugh or they can make us cry. We can spend our time reading various types of books such as story books, informative books, etc. That is why books are my best friends.

9. Final score

Based on the above parameters, we would give the paragraph a 6 out of 10. While Smit has accurately described the positive aspects of books and their role in our lives, there are some grammatical errors and the paragraph lacks originality and critical thinking. Additionally, the paragraph could be improved with better sentence structure and coherence.

3. Submission by:
Swastika Chowdhury, Kolkata


Analytical Essay on 'Diana - Actaeon Myth'

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Assessment by BhashaLab:

1. Summary
The essay is a summary of the myth of Diana and Actaeon, as told by Ovid in his Metamorphoses. In the story, the mortal hunter Actaeon accidentally comes across the goddess Diana bathing nude with her nymphs. The nymphs try to cover her nakedness, but Diana is furious and transforms Actaeon into a stag. He is unable to speak and flees in fear, only to be tracked down and killed by his own hunting dogs. The essay highlights the pathos of the story and the modern attitude of Ovid in presenting the tale from a human perspective.


2. Spellings
Kudos! You have made no spelling mistakes.

3. Grammar
You are one of a kind! There are no grammar mistakes in your essay. 


4. Originality and Critical Thinking
The essay shows originality and critical thinking. It presents a unique analysis and interpretation of the myth of Diana and Actaeon, drawing connections to themes of divine retribution and human perspective. The essay does not simply repeat information from other sources, but instead offers a fresh perspective on the story.

5. Logical Structure and Flow
The essay has a logical structure and flow. Each paragraph supports the thesis and builds on the ideas of previous paragraphs, providing a clear and cohesive overview of the story of Diana and Actaeon. The essay begins with a summary of the events of the story, then goes on to discuss the significance of the tale and its connection to themes of divine retribution and human perspective. The essay concludes by reiterating the main points and highlighting the unique perspective of Ovid. Overall, the essay has a logical structure and flow.


6. Areas of Improvement
One potential area for improvement in the essay could be to provide more analysis and interpretation of the story and its significance. For example, the essay could discuss the themes of divine retribution and human perspective, as mentioned in the conclusion, in more depth. Additionally, the essay could provide more context and background information about Ovid and his Metamorphoses, as well as the broader tradition of classical mythology. This would provide a stronger foundation for the analysis and make the essay more engaging and informative.

7. Your score:

8 out of 10

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